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Sela -- To be a writer / pen's a miter / and crozier for the crowds / who look for light / 'mongst prose's bite, / and find it, stout ...

Very much to the final sentence. On the note of brevity, the dialogue would be more apt were it more distinguishable by character. Idiotmatic for the girl, at least--which it ...

Hullo O Sinister Jigster. ^_^ Turnabout's fair-play, da? though in this case 'tis positive, rather the eye for an eye sort; a thanks for the remarks on mine. Anyhow, I ...

Oy, there are some brilliant layers here. ^_^ I'll be back. But only as a brief note - The only aspect in a skimming of it that brought my mind ...

'Lo dear Sela. ^_^ I somewhat disagree with Chernobyl here. In its form, it hits the note of faster paced fiction oft aimed at a younger audience. And the dialogue ...

'Lo Sythe. You've gotten a rather good array of critiques here; and I shouldn't like to be redundant. All in all, it's not anything technical in this that is fatal. ...

Hey Smor-- Oy, I have to admit that the first few lines made me quirk an eyebrow, so to speak. What bloody heck sort of moment. Ha, but from an ...

'Lo Jenna. ^_^ ...ah, I'll run it through, line by line at first--a few things in noticed that felt repetitions or awkward. “Mr. Benedict, are you up here?” Oh, Hell ...

Hello Spear Maiden, The literary forums are for your own work, not for other author's previously published work--no matter whether you give credit or not. If you'd edit this, and ...

Hullo Twiggy. ^_^ Oy, no doubt it is very Dickinson--in its form inarguably, but as well as in the language and the simple contemplation. And in its similarity to Dickinson, ...

My dearest Sela, I think you've hit it. ^_^ Oy, there's always room for improvement, and you do linger on the second bit longer than is probably apt for balance. ...

Hey Icaruss. ^_^ Oy, that was clever. And it makes perfect short fiction. The hint of something odd, with the way the first sentence begins keeps one interested in finding ...

Hullo Twitter--or Wooster. I rather like the name Twooster, actually, er, as long as you don't mind. ^_^ Pardon me for beginning on an impertinent note. It's not always the ...

Hey Junc. ^_^ Er, anything somewhat recent that you've written and would like to post? I'd hit this with a critique. But I'd hate to tinker with something you'd done ...

Oy, Kylan, as an introduction this drew me in immediately. Taut narrative and layered dialogue. ...I'll be back to say rather more than that, with any luck. ^_^ But since ...